Only if the feelings were still alive and soul wasn't ceased,
Only if things would have been the way you could feel pleased..!
Only if the tiny things don't look nasty because of the Ego,
Only if you just stick to people you love and don't just let go..!
Only if you could hold my hand tight and cared to talk,
Only if you could wait bit longer and we shared a walk..!
Only if the world go the way you think it really would,
Only if you dream impossible and work the way you should..!
Only if the warmness of heart doesn't start to feel like heat,
Only if the records were set for the love and you could beat..!
Only if it was really so easy to move on and heal a wound,
Only if the breaking the hearts and hopes could make a sound..!
Yes, if only - it will I'm sure! Beautiful verse!
ReplyDeleteI love your use of repitition and rhyme.
ReplyDeleteI loved this poem, it said so much but why, oh why weren't the first two words in every line transposed to "If only"? Then it would be outstanding. Were you trying to avoid a comparison to Kipling's "If"?
ReplyDeleteoh but they do make a sound, we just often over look it...nice form with the repitition and nice TT
ReplyDelete" ... Only if it was really so easy to move on and heal a wound,
ReplyDeleteOnly if the breaking the hearts and hopes could make a sound!"
Ahhh, yes, if only!!
Good rhyme work.
ReplyDeleteThis has beautiful such a beautiful flow and the repetition is used most effectively. Lovely =)
ReplyDeleteThanks everyone for visiting..! :)
ReplyDelete@Oldegg:- Yeah, that is so much true..! :)
I see....only if instead of If only....then it wud seem like the film If only...good one...
ReplyDeletekeep posting :):):)
Beautiful. Smooth flowing.
ReplyDeleteLast lines - Please let breaking of hearts and hopes not make sound!
That is when silence helps, doesn't it?